Bombastic given
bombardment by the grace of God
relent, rely, realize
the fire’s breeding spaces
but only by a history of shrieking faces.
Somewhere, waiting, with Names on a list
He’s waiting
for a soul or indifferent ravens
ours is but to do or die
barbaric bearing on the graceless lover–
just a click and all will sever.
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whew….really nice intensity chris…particularly that opening stanza…
to do or die… it’s tough how the destiny over hundreds of people can be just a click on a button away..
Love it.. the alliterations make it work so well … and those indifferent ravens … almost like a juxtaposition..
Glad they struck a chord! Alliteration can make or break a poem, after all–but those ravens needed to have their flight, and it was but a matter of how to set them free.
Wowsa! I like the intensity of the poem. Makes me think of good vs evil and how we make choices daily: do or die~love this!
Sometimes the only separation between the two–good and evil–IS a click. A single decision. Who knows how many forks in the road we face just on a daily basis…
Powerful and intense, loved it especially “He’s waiting for a soul or indifferent ravens”.
Much like Bjorn, I loved the indifferent ravens (a wonderfully apt description) and the lliteration. Intensity itself.
Nice! Loved the intensity in such a short poem.
Yes! Excellent work done.. Cool flow.
Very well done, nicely crafted.