I wanted something suitably nature-oriented for this special One Shot Wednesday – since the party begins on Tuesday, after all, and this Tuesday is the summer solstice, the longest and (hopefully) most beautiful of days. My inspiration seemed cut off by grey clouds this morning, sadly, but with the afternoon there seems to have come a break in the haze of summer, treating my muse to blue skies and colored fields. In that same vein, I tried to step outside my usual, and go for a touch of tanka.
Hope the weather’s treating you all as kindly. May it be a fertile day for creativity!
Mother dances green
Before Father’s skyward kiss.
Sweet husband Golden
Pirouetting long shadows
Across her blossom billows.
And here’s a bit of greenery to put a little summer slant into your day…cheers!
beautiful tanka! have a great long summer-y day! heheh
Lovely little poem
You’re always good with the form poetry. I’m going to have to eventually give it a try. I love how your words dance here 🙂
lovely way to highlight the relationship that births the season…lots of texture too in a few words….well played chris…have a great one shot! and thank you
Agree with Lori. You’re quite good at form poetry. Your concision with language and knowledge of meanings shines through. Very nice interacting of the scene, colors, and subjects, Chris.
Nice tanka! The last couplet is quite beautiful and quite lyrical when read aloud. Happy solstice my friend! ~ Rose
Your words dance off the page-love it!
beautiful ~ I too was taken by the day ~ Summer Solstice blessings to you ~ Lib ~ @Libithina
lovely personification, gentle and refreshing to read!
Beauty, love, family, lyrical. Love it.
The solstice brings out the best in you, Chris. Short, effective tanka, and the personification makes for a nice turn at the right spot. Our weather here decided to suddenly moderate from burning blast furnace to gorgeous early summer–must be the Mother dancing green. ;_)
Gorgeous mother earth, her sky and all of blessed nature on this glorious first day of summer here in RI as well. Must try the tanka, yours is perfect.
Enjoyed how you made the scene so interactive with your words, taking on family and the season, very well done.
This is lovely! Perfect for the day.
Beautiful Cheis, I was kind of hoping by now that the green man would have seduced the goddess bringing us at least some summer, as it is, the temp hardly pushing the 50’s and sitting here in a jumper dreaming of summer. Ahhhh hopefully your words will weave their magic and bring us some warmth. Great imagery you use here in such a short form.
What a sweet solstitial. Happy green day back atcha! – Brendan
love the blossom billow..we had gorgeous weather yesterday…i was giving a group of czech vip customers a guided tour in basel and we were crossing the river by ferry and had a great time, enjoying the city and the weather
Ooohhh… LOVELY!! As beautiful as the weather here, Chris! Seriously, the picture AND the tanka made me feel like a peacock, ready for its monsoon dance… A thoroughly energizing read, my friend!
Hope you are having a WONDERFUL summer!!!
Here’s wishing you the best days ahead…
What a heavenly ‘love story’ Chris! I love you made symbols work out the image and the significance of summer solstice in our lives! I love how the images rise sheer as a dream, ‘pirouetting long shadows’ toward the last line. Powerful poem!
Lovely piece!! Enjoyed reading this.
This was a wonderful tanka and the description of the nature in poetic form is highly engaging. The way you account earth, skies, sun, sea and blooming flowers to mark the day is so soothing and reviving.
Your words sure warmed me up as I endure the Winter solstice down my end of the globe… Brrrr!
i love tanka and yours is as perfect as the summer it describes! i hope you have a lovely summer.