Darkness
Begets salvation.
–
Closed eyes embrace
Wide-spaced longing,
Riveted in fire like
Old angels lacquered
With the doubt—
–
The weight,
They will come to call it,
It lies heavy on the backs
That would toil clouds
To submission.
–
Naked passions
Circumvent the sense of it,
Armani dreams, Gucci heart
Wing-tipped longing stands
Fleshy and forgotten.
–
Icarus saw this
Falling.
* My latest work for One Shoot Sunday. Based on the images I provided this week when I graffiti’d One Stop. Yes, that’s right – my travels around Lansing have yielded a great deal of graffiti photos, and this week we decided to plaster this little offering of rebel-art up for all you fellow poets to pour over. So have a look, see what catches your fancy, and enjoy!
Interesting perspective of the falling through far-reaching lines…. really dig the third stanza.
“The weight, / They will come to call it, / It lies heavy on the backs / That would toil clouds / To submission.” Great work today— graffiti photos included. Cheers, Chris
“toil clouds to submission”, love it Chris!
This has a processional feel to it, words lined up, each playing a part that builds to such a clean and well thought out conclusion. This is very good indeed, Chris. Enjoyed it , and your fine job of getting us the prompt, very much.
“Naked passions
Circumvent the sense of it,
Armani dreams, Gucci heart
Wing-tipped longing stands
Fleshy and forgotten..”
…and so you have given us an exquisite portrait of so many falling Icarus’ enrapped and entrapped in the realm of Maya…empires rise and empires fall…Kudos once again Chris! Roger ☺
This is a brilliant piece! The source of inspiration has really only been a starting block for a poem of magnificent scope and vision. Loved it and love your photos.
oh there’s a lot of lines i like in this poem chris…very creative ideas..love that you take it from the greek mythology to today with the Armani dreams and Gucci hearts
and thanks for sharing your excellent pictures with us at one stop!!
very nice chris…this is crisp and i feel the fall through the words to your very nice close…the bringing it relevant with the gucci and armani…nice.
I echo Claudia’s remarks.. like the way you time-traveled the reader.. this is a well crafted piece..(mine is more a statement,)
Great lines here: “Naked passions
Circumvent the sense of it,”
much enjoyed 🙂
I loved how you brought the Greek mythology into play by including Icarus falling into the Aegean. Nice ending!
This is very beautiful and lyrical– a gorgeous lament from the prompt. mine is not up at wordpress, but at http://parolavivace.blogspot.com . xxxj
To now read the image creators words to the piece is quite profound. I read this over and loved to linger in this stanza:
“The weight,
They will come to call it,
It lies heavy on the backs
That would toil clouds
To submission.”
Truly great write Chris and thank you for the inspiring images! ~ Rose
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“Icarus saw this
Falling.”
fabulous ending to a brilliant poem! i love your photos ~ thanks for sharing them with us at One Stop Poetry.
Intriguing poem built upon the Icarus myth with the mystical “Darkness begets salvation”. Many thanks for the graffiti prompts!
Chris, I’m feeling like this is kind of awesome in every way. Well done!
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