Enjoy the Show

Photo © Mike Roemer.

Smoke curls on skin,

The taste of ash in flickering den –

—Like candy, almost they –

Swill it down in cabernet, the swirl

Around me howls revelation

And they think that I’m salvation –

—Little yellow dress and a

—Come hither stare gripped –

But hunny, look again –

Everybody gets a taste, but the wine

It’s just for sipping –

—I can smile at the sensation

—But it’s just a Vegas show;

—No dipping, you dip.

My submission to the latest One Shoot Sunday Photo Prompt, with that spicy little pic provided by one Mike Roemer, a Wisconsin Photographer I interviewed for One Stop. Great guy, with some really crisp commercial photography…very high quality stuff. Have a look when you get the chance, and check out all the other poets inspired by the prompt!

And also, a writer’s note. WordPress was being uncooperative today. All lines with the “—” in them are meant to be indented. So when you’re visualizing the structure of the piece – bear that in mind.

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13 thoughts on “Enjoy the Show

  1. “—Like candy, almost they – / Swill it down in cabernet, the swirl / Around me howls revelation / And they think that I’m salvation –” Great rhyme, internal ones too. Your use of direct address cracked me up…. WTF, WordPress? Weird it would do that. No biggie though. Great poem & interview!

  2. Everybody gets a taste, but the wine/ It’s just for sipping

    You caught a great metrical line along with a powerful embedded meaning.

    Wow! A lot of swilling, howling, and gripping in this piece. I think I’m finished for today. I need to calm down. I’ll go watch a football game. 🙂

  3. Wonderful writing/ gosh that seems to hit it so well with this image! (I’m not participating this time, but really enjoying reading some of these impressions from the photo prompt) The flow of this writing impressed me quite well! Far greater than some woman blowing smoke! (Though an amazing photograph for sure, so many thoughts upon it) 🙂 Excellent! ~April

  4. I was wondering about all the “—–” Not exactly your usual..but they didn’t hurt anything. As dustus says, a lot of nice internal rhyme and movement keeping it all together, with an exemplary image or two for topping.

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