Repetition

Hunched shoulders to the

Sun of my iniquity,

The voiceless being cries “arise!”

And my back bows

Like a farmer to his plow

Repetition of identified

Annihilation of character

Gradually weans the child-mind

To thoughts of nonexistence—

Sometimes I think I’m going insane,

Then I wake

And do it all again.

* My latest contribution to the wonderful One Shot Poetry Wednesdays! Once you’ve had a look, check out some of the other One Shot Poets as well– they’re a skilled bunch of poets, looking to form a community and support one another.  Enjoy!

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23 thoughts on “Repetition

  1. I liked this and am at the same time puzzled. Every line unfolds for me fluidly through the end of the poem which as everyone has said is powerful and bonding. Nevertheless, I am intrigued by the first two lines.

    Truth is I’m sort of obsessed these days with first lines. These seem personal to me and as though they have a deep personal symbolism for you as that is where you started. I don’t have a hook into “sun of my iniquity”. If it’s a reference to other words, I don’t know it.

    But I’m guessing it’s your own and would really give us a deeper insight into the piece. Still I hold with “never complain, never explain” but I thought I’d say that anyway. Beautiful writing. Thank you, Gay

  2. The voiceless being cries “arise!” – that was so so good. The whole poem was excellent. The over-and-over again sameness…it can be soul-sucking for sure. You captured that essence perfectly.

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