Can you hear me now?
A spirit on your shoulder would ask the question how
but I think between us we shall know
it’s long since lost the trancing glow—
every calculated bleating
is a pointed technologic drifting
from the act an individual nation
dared to call communication.
communication is surely a prickly pear….online communication all the more because it is using a very limited scope…you can not hear inflection, see body language….texting for instance…
Great closing line – brings the whole piece together so well.
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no doubt the “ether” has detracted from quality of communication in some cases, but I think too that the availability of voices 24/7 also leads us to settle for less…in my line of work, relations have become the short-cut and are much more difficult to build. Fights and spats are easier and faster to blow up due to an unintended breach of etiquette or a mis-interpretation of a four word message that used to take at least a ten minute phone conversation…an interesting piece that I hope I didn’t take too much liberty with.
Great subtle use of rhyme here, Chris–you are a poet’s poet for sure–always meticulous and real. Fine work here, especially the sense of a lot of noise and static not just between individuals but between nations, conveyed simply and cleanly.
You make the difficult easy just as easy communication make the established protocol difficult. Well written. Thank you.
nicely done chris…and really beyond all technology the essence is simply (or not so simply) letting go of thinking while listening (even through written words)…then we can thoughtfully communicate.
enjoyed this Chris, its a double edge the ease of mass communicate versus the mutation it can create…well executed my friend. Send you love and well! ~ Rose
This is finely developed…tight yet the message gets through.
Lady Nyo